Introduction: No introduction, no thesis statement.
Tangible cultural heritage section: You make some good general points, but I do not see a source for the definition of cultural heritage that you use here. You use UNESCO as a source here, but I do not see the citation for that on your reference page.
Monuments Men section: You cite Wullschlager et al for in-text citation, but there is no citation for this author on your reference page.
Artifact: OK on your choice of the Madonna of Bruges, some good information about what she represents, but not on how this artifact was rescued or saved by the Moments Men. No citation for the information in this paragraph.
UNESCO cultural heritage site: You chose a site that qualified for this assignment. You cite UNESCO, but again, the full citation is not on your reference page. Information looks like it might be taken directly from a source, in which case it should have quotation marks around it, as well as a proper in-text citation.
Conclusion: Information in this paragraph largely looks to be taken from a source, but no source is cited here for any of the information. Not well organized for a concluding paragraph, and includes information that was already discussed in other parts of your essay, or belongs in another part of your essay (the part about the Madonna).
Reference page: None of the citations listed are cited in the essay itself, and none of the citations in the essay appear on your reference page.
Formatting is off, as you use different font styles and sizes in various parts of this assignment. Think about your essays as having a seamless flow from introduction, through the main points of the body, through the conclusion.
Work very hard on learning on to summarize and paraphrase information from sources, and remember to use quotation marks around any information that is taken word-for-word from sources. The latter should usually never exceed about 10% of your paper, as we are looking for your original thinking/writing, supported by information from sources that is summarized and paraphrased, and occasionally quoted from directly.
Jill Wiske , May 18 at 7:03pm
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